Hidden assassin!
This was shot during a nude photo shoot with two models, and at the end they wanted to have some fun so I let them do I believe is dramatic not only because of the pose but also cause of the lighting and of course the models' make up also adds to the scene.
The lighting?? How does this lighting make it dramatic? It's way too blown out and overexposed, plus there are harsh shadows everywhere.
As far as the composition goes; it's almost impossible to see that the metal object is supposed to be a sword. At first glance, it looks like she's about to walk under a limbo stick.
From my point of view, it looks like you're so focused on the fact the models are nude, that you're completely ignoring all the other elements that make up a good photo. The lighting is amateur; not dramatic.