The light on her face is nice. Barring the ability to retroactively tell the model to put their hand down, I probably would have removed that awkward hand (?? it doesn't really even look like a hand or wrist or arm but I'm pretty sure there's nothing else it could be) on the camera left side of her body. And personally I would have filled in some of the hair where you can see the highlight on her far shoulder peeking through.
As far as your rim/back light goes, either pump it up more, or remove it altogether. As minimal as it is, it's just kind of distracting and not really doing anything for the photo other than emphasizing flyaways and lumps in her hair. Also, her skin is several different colors and levels of saturation (which is natural! But the camera over-emphasizes it, especially under certain lighting conditions). Maybe go through and use some hue/saturation or color blend mode layers to even it out, or the skin tone tool in Capture One.
The light on her face is nice. Barring the ability to retroactively tell the model to put their hand down, I probably would have removed that awkward hand (?? it doesn't really even look like a hand or wrist or arm but I'm pretty sure there's nothing else it could be) on the camera left side of her body. And personally I would have filled in some of the hair where you can see the highlight on her far shoulder peeking through.
As far as your rim/back light goes, either pump it up more, or remove it altogether. As minimal as it is, it's just kind of distracting and not really doing anything for the photo other than emphasizing flyaways and lumps in her hair. Also, her skin is several different colors and levels of saturation (which is natural! But the camera over-emphasizes it, especially under certain lighting conditions). Maybe go through and use some hue/saturation or color blend mode layers to even it out, or the skin tone tool in Capture One.
Hope this helps!
It does help! Thanks for taking the time to write such thorough feedback. I really appreciate it!