My first thought was about the pose...TBH, I think it looks awkward. However, I like how you've balanced the flash powers. I might even raise the main light by about 0.7. The kick from camera left seems to be just right. I just wish she were in a more flattering pose to catch all that nice light.
It also looks like you may have missed focus just a bit. The eyes look soft. From what I can see, it looks focused on her lips rather than her nearest eye. I always use a single focus point in my viewfinder, put it directly on the nearest eyeball, focus, then recompose. That generally gives me nice sharp focus on the eye(s).
My first thought was about the pose...TBH, I think it looks awkward. However, I like how you've balanced the flash powers. I might even raise the main light by about 0.7. The kick from camera left seems to be just right. I just wish she were in a more flattering pose to catch all that nice light.
It also looks like you may have missed focus just a bit. The eyes look soft. From what I can see, it looks focused on her lips rather than her nearest eye. I always use a single focus point in my viewfinder, put it directly on the nearest eyeball, focus, then recompose. That generally gives me nice sharp focus on the eye(s).