The poles on the foreground are distracting. They form sort of a leading line and guide my eye out of the frame.
Also the lighting is quite flat. So as a viewer I am confused, what is the main subject here.
May be a bit of dodging and Burning would help.
2) Seems the shutter was open for too long. There is some kind of motion recording in front of the building.
I would retake the shot, without cars and all.
Thanks for the critique but all the things you mentioned are intentional. It's a view of the road so I included the posts as a leading line to take people down the road. I agree that it could do with a bit more contrast. I've already lightened the front of the theater slightly and It's a long exposure shot on a busy road, the motion blurring of the car was again intentional.
Hi Shyama, i know what leading lines are and how they work. The centre building is a prominent part of the photo but it's not the main point of the photo. It's a photo of the street itself, and like I said, I composed it like that intentionally. I want people to be led off down the road. If you notice that the theatre isn't completely dead centre? I deliberately biased it so people looking at the photo , see the theatre and think "that's interesting" before continuing down the road - much like they do in real life. I guess if I have to explain it then it didn't work!
Seriously, thanks for your opinion. It's made me look closer at the photo and I agree with what your saying, I think I was being too subtle with what I was trying to achieve here.
Hi Paul,
Interesting shot. I find the tall street light pole distracting especially as it touches the frame edge. My eye goes there first off. The motion blur is a nice contrast to the architecture of the theater but I think it might be better with the blur being equally weighted to the buildings...now it seems secondary.
Best...Mike
Thanks Mike. Yeah, that bloody lamp post. If I compose without it, I loose the squiggly lines on the pavement and the pov I'm after. I'm loathe to photoshop it out but I might have to.
Few things I would do, if I were you:
1) Reframe the Shot:
The poles on the foreground are distracting. They form sort of a leading line and guide my eye out of the frame.
Also the lighting is quite flat. So as a viewer I am confused, what is the main subject here.
May be a bit of dodging and Burning would help.
2) Seems the shutter was open for too long. There is some kind of motion recording in front of the building.
I would retake the shot, without cars and all.
Thanks for the critique but all the things you mentioned are intentional. It's a view of the road so I included the posts as a leading line to take people down the road. I agree that it could do with a bit more contrast. I've already lightened the front of the theater slightly and It's a long exposure shot on a busy road, the motion blurring of the car was again intentional.
Sorry, but I am still confused what is the main subject here. Generally leading lines are used to point the viewer to the main subject.
As I understand, the main subject is the centre building here. So why lead the viewer towards the corner of the frame?
Hi Shyama, i know what leading lines are and how they work. The centre building is a prominent part of the photo but it's not the main point of the photo. It's a photo of the street itself, and like I said, I composed it like that intentionally. I want people to be led off down the road. If you notice that the theatre isn't completely dead centre? I deliberately biased it so people looking at the photo , see the theatre and think "that's interesting" before continuing down the road - much like they do in real life. I guess if I have to explain it then it didn't work!
It does not work for me, I am sorry.
However its just an opinion.
You should check with others and see what is the generic feedback. Good Luck!
Seriously, thanks for your opinion. It's made me look closer at the photo and I agree with what your saying, I think I was being too subtle with what I was trying to achieve here.
Hi Paul,
No Worries. I am glad you are able to see my point of view.
I love some of your long exposure work, on your website.
Thanks Shyama.I really like your images as well, Especially the architecture shot with the aeroplane. That won photo of the day didn't it?
Hi Paul,
Interesting shot. I find the tall street light pole distracting especially as it touches the frame edge. My eye goes there first off. The motion blur is a nice contrast to the architecture of the theater but I think it might be better with the blur being equally weighted to the buildings...now it seems secondary.
Best...Mike
Thanks Mike. Yeah, that bloody lamp post. If I compose without it, I loose the squiggly lines on the pavement and the pov I'm after. I'm loathe to photoshop it out but I might have to.