I am looking for some constructive criticism and advice on what I can do for this photo. I have my original edit, my re-edit, and my re-re-edit. The re-edit is first. Then original. And finally my re-re-edit.
I am looking for some constructive criticism and advice on what I can do for this photo. I have my original edit, my re-edit, and my re-re-edit. The re-edit is first. Then original. And finally my re-re-edit.
Is that the old factory next to the Little Miami River near the King's Island amusement park? I used to drive past there in the 60s to go canoeing in the river. At that time, it was a warehouse used to age whiskey. During World War II, I believe it was a munitions or gunpowder factory.
I like the first photo best, because the darker image better conveys the feeling of abandonment.
Yes that is the factory. It has since exploaded several times and is not being transformed into apartments
Interesting building and I really like the sign. Definitely the first for me. I think I would have liked it a bit wider. I wish I could see the top and bottom of building and more of whatever is just coming into the frame on the right. A more moody sky would be great too if you get the chance to reshoot.
Thanks for the advice. It’s about 4 hours from where I live so reshoot may be a while out, but if I ever make it back there I will definitely take that into consideration
Good image in the first place, and I think you're on the right track with your successive edits, Chloe.
It reminds me of how a succession of images of mine looks as I "dial in" to what at first is a half-formed concept until I finally get the definitive composition, frequently by moving in closer and reframing. For me, your final composition is more powerful, and better balanced. The shiny fence and the diagonal don't quite work, and the sliver at right is distracting. I guess I try to do at the scene what you've done in post here when I can, and rarely crop the final result. This location would lend itself to many different images, including variants of this one.
I like the dark effect. The only suggestion I can think of is perspective correction to make the verticals vertical. Good job all round, and it's interesting to "see" you pursuing your vision in this series. I DON'T think you're going down the over-processing rabbit hole, and note that you've been wary about this from the outset. You have a great receptive, thoughtful attitude. Always a pleasure to see your posts.
You really have a feel for visual imagery. Keep at it.
Thank you so much!
Chris. I went in a removed the weird object in the bottom right corner and fixed the verticals. Here is the finished product.
Sorry, Chloe, I wasn't very clear. What I meant was getting the verticals all parallel as well as vertical. With subjects like buildings, if you shoot upwards, the higher parts are further away and thus look smaller, converging. Thsi can be effective in itself when it is marked, as commonly happens with wide-angle lenses, but small amounts can detract from the image.
Most software has perspective correction to correct this. It entails first trying to make sure the image isn't rotated by making a line in the middle (here, the edge of the tower and the junction with the painted brick lower down) vertical. Then, the lines at the top are fanned out a bit until they're all vertical and parallel rather than converging. Sometimes a tiny bit of residual convergence looks better, as completely fixing this can give the top part of the structure a looming quality. I've tried to "fix" this completely in this edit. You be the judge about the looming effect. Note that doing this crops, so if you anticipate, you can take a slightly wider view at capture, esp. with a zoom.
All this is reversed if you're shooting down at buildings, the lower parts converging.