I think that this photo would benefit if her eyes were brightened up or werent squinting. Its a good candid shot. However I believe the timing was just a micro second off. Dont be at all discouraged however. This photo shows talent and a lot of potential.

Lovely shot! I love the processing, but I'm not sure that it suits the mood of the expression, which I really like. I agree with Connor about brightening the eyes and perhaps that would fix a lot for me. Still a great shot!